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The Challenges of Living in a Big City

(1) With the development of economy and urbanization, the number of big cities is constantly increasing in China. (2) While big cities are attracting more and more people, they also bring many challenges, such as traffic jam and pollution, just to name a few

(3) The first problem that really bothers me is the traffic congestion during rush hours. I hate waiting for buses and being late for school or work. (4)The next problem is that the large population in big cities makes them so crowded that we can hardly find a peaceful place unless staying at home. Supermarkets are always crowded, so are cinemas and parks. (5)Another consequence of the large population is that it intensifies the inadequacy of high-quality medical and educational resources, thus decreasing residents'sense of happiness.

(6) As a result, although I am frequently asked whether I like to live in a big city or not, my answer is always"no, definitely not. What about you?

精彩点评

(1)引出话题:大城市的数量不断增加。

(2)欲抑先扬,指出大城市吸引越来越多的人,但也 带来诸多挑战。

(3)、(4)、(5)分别使用“ The first problem that really bothers me is...”“ The next problem is that.. “Another consequence of the large population is that.”具体阐述在大城市生活面临的挑战。

(6)用 as a result总结全文,再次重申自己的观点, 并以问句结尾,增强互动性。

加分亮点

urbanization 城市化

constantly 不断地

traffic jam 交通拥堵

just to name a few 仅举几例

bother 烦扰,打扰

intensify 加剧

adequacy 不充分,不足

resident 居民

全文翻译

生活在大城市的挑战

随着经济和城市化的发展,中国大城市的数量在不断增加。尽管大城市正吸引着越来越多的人,但它们也 带来了诸多挑战,比如交通拥堵和污染问题,仅举几例。

困扰我的首要问题是上下班高峰时段的交通拥堵。我讨厌等公交车,也讨厌上学或上班迟到。第二个问题 是大城市人口众多,使城市非常拥挤,以至于我们除非待在家里,否则很难找到一个安静之所。超市人满为患、 电影院和公园也是如此。众多的人口带来的另一个后果是它加剧了优质医疗和教育资源的匮乏,从而降低了居 民的幸福感。

因此,尽管我经常被问到是否喜欢住在大城市,但我的答案一直都是“不,绝对不喜欢”。那你呢?